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pretty good seems like Völund likes smoking it more than eating it as a cookie.

since he was smoking it during their brain storming session 54,760+ or so years ago.

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chapter 134
Mount Doom: Early Sixth Period

“Idea lad?” Boggy asked.
“Well, I, and I suspect Völund, still have a stash of cookies we could use.”
Reggie said rather hesitantly.

should’t Völund be replaced with Phaestus

i remember Völund just getting drunk.

reggie and phaestus were the ones who cookied.

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chapter 125
keepers city

Around the bush, hidden from his previous view, but
otherwise in plain site was the body of a young girl! Verigas
recoiled in horror.

replace site with sight.

i could be wrong though.

second opinion?

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sign me up for the beta for book 3.

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so any news when the beta’s will start?

or if Tizzy can sneak out an advance chapter of any of the books?

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i want to sign in to both.
into the wilds beta and oak orks beta.

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[quote=The Author Guy;5780]So the big problem I am having with Sentir Fallon, Beragamos and Tiernon recognizing Orcus is that I don’t want to give away the library scene where Tom realizes he looks just like Orcus.

I do allude to it with Torean and Tiernon, but don’t push it.

I admit it should have come up in Book 2, but I wasn’t ready for the revelation and didn’t even think about them recognizing him at the time.

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wait wasn’t there a part that said that it was a standard form semi-common among tier 4? greater demons.
can’t remember what tom is 4 i think or 4.9.

I think i remember some demon saying/thinking some people have all the luck.
about tom

i think it was in book 1 when he is visiting the courts.
can’t be too sure.
or maybe it was zargofastan.
when he is protecting his master.

also its been 4000 years since they last saw either form of Orcus in the flesh their memory might be hazy.
they might have the same thing that Orcus has with the library of enemies.

you can have Tiernon go to his hall of remembrance to look at what Orcus looked like and just say this is troubling.

also i don’t think Beragamos or sentir fallon would have a wall of enemies to keep his memory fresh on how Orcus looked like.

he only appeared in his human form at the citadel of light meeting.
Beragamos could say didn’t you used to have a beard.
because the book seems to focus on the beard.

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so timeline of E.M. ?
Lilith, Sentir Fallon and net forged the blade in secret.

Sutekh, God of Chaos
Dark Apostle Stoivenychas

some how involved probably the ones to give it the antimus juice
or Sutekh got his hands on antimus based metal.
blade gets forged.
sutekh adds other abilities secretly to dagger.

sentir fallon blesses the dagger to hide it from Tiernon.

orcus killed by sentir

sentir stores the blade in temple under orders.
Sentir gets transferred to astlan.
decides to grab the dagger to take with him.
stores it in Astlan.
because of the blades hidden abilities corrupts those around it.
Sentir gets corrupted since he probably was stationed where the blade was.

because of his corruption starts banging Lilith.

also vets Exador as Arch-Vicar General

Tiernon scales back avatar appearances 1000+ years ago.

Sentir loses track of dagger.

few hundred years later some knight digs it up.
while spring cleaning.
thinks cool the blade that killed a demon prince. starts using it.

blade begins transferring from most senior knight rampant to senior knight rampant.

eventually ends up with Talarius eight years ago.

Sentir tells Tiernon he lost track of dagger for past 900 years
recently tracked it down Sentir found out dagger in use thought meh.

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The Jilted Bride was the NEVER spoken name
of Lilith. Well, not actually a name, more of a tile, in fact, an epithet.

tile should be title.

Schwarzenfürze growled in Gastropé direction causing him to drop
is finger and swallow.

is should be his

Damien grimaced, Vaselle suddenly realized they’d were still
wearing the same close they’d been wearing at Mount Doom where there
was quite a bit of sulfur in the air.

close should be clothes

the prophet of torean

fassbinder?
has 3 different spelling of his name
fassbinder
fassbindhtr
fassbindr

also one of the stevensword names is mispelled just search for steven

i will post more here IF i find some.

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hey got a problem. here.

chapter 128
Mount Doom: DOA+7, Late First Period

Tom thought for a moment, “it also explains that why once
Doom shutdown and the D’Orcs no longer got tired, and many stopped
sleeping, so many of them gave up the will to live. It was this immortal
existential dread!” Tom shook his head, this made so much more sense
now.

in book two it said some of the elder D’orcs ended up sleeping in despair and gave up the will to live.

when they are discussing beds

Tom chuckled. “ But you did need babies.”
Zelda grinned. “ Indeed we did. But also because… well, to be honest, many of the elders were filled with despair and sorrow. This caused them to sleep more, and sometimes worse.”
Tom shuddered, thinking about the depressed D’Orcs.

which is it did they end up sleeping or not.
or did they just lie around in their beds in despair.
also when did the elders end up dying?
right after Orcus’s death or after a few hundred years.

chapter 121
Murgatroy

Vaselle Zed and Teragdor

dicussing Vaselle’s boss

“And what does this Edwyrd do?” Teragdor asked while taking
another swig of beer.
“He’s an animage. Mostly pyromancy.” Vaselle answered, trying
to remember what his master had told him of this Edwyrd identity.

shouldn’t the pyromancy be pyromastery instead?

or is this an issue with Vaselle not knowing it’s pyromastery instead of pyromancy.
or is he dumbing it down for his audience.

also in the beginning of the book Sam ends up thinking of breathing.

The ambient temperature should have
been near the boiling point of water, instead, a few minutes ago he had
seen his breath start to liquefy as it left his body and cooled. Clearly, it
was the carbon dioxide, but as it had gotten colder, he began to wonder
about the oxygen, nitrogen and argon. This form liked to breathe and it
would be terribly inconvenient if the air suddenly became liquid. His furs
would also get soggy.

doe’s Sam’s human form really need to breath or is it an idiosyncrasy of his.

Or is he eccentric enough to make his human form have all its needs and issues.

I think i remember Tom/Edwyrd forgetting to breath when he’s in his human form.
or maybe that’s from another book i am reading.

also woot used a big word.

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well i guess i read too much in to knowing where each others private rooms are.

they were sneaking into the others rooms through out book 2.

also

Lilith smiled mischievously. “ I suppose they are the same. But I am actually referring to something more
specific.” She turned to look around the room, providing her voluptuous profile for his review.
“ And that is what?” Sentir asked, starting to lose patience for her games. Tempting as it may be, her presence here was too dangerous.

TEMPTING dun dun dun.

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Chapter 146 would be a good place to put it.
he can be sent back to doom island when tom is updating the 4 demons.

he should be at the meeting but in disguise have him in one of those Sauron looking shadow hoods. which hide the face and changes the voice.

Then after the forces of life win he can come back for the victory celebrations.
he can bump in to Teragdor again in another bar. during the next book.

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first what was the cold spell talked about here

chapter 137 DoomSpa: Minutes Later

“No, she got in a few captives from Doom’s Redoubt. I know one guy, who chose
to flee to the hinterlands after the cold spell, he was captured in one of our raids and she
tortured him for a solid two decades before she got bored and tossed him out on the
slopes of Mount Doom to drag his seriously broken body back to the Redoubt.” Talgorf
said. “He spoke of her often for the next six or seven hundred years. You don’t forget
someone with her expertise.”

also

why did Orcus not use the abyss for extreme physical training for his mortal followers?

there were a bunch of people from nysegard following him.

getting beaten up for a few months would increase their skills pretty quickly without them dying from the training.

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at the start of chapter 123

Stevos should mention the AARC while he’s talking to Teragdor about saint school.

how one of the things they learn is how to use an AARC.
also how it came to be.

like that there was an avatar/archon with 150 Illuminaries some of who happened to get caught up in a major battle.
and about 2/3 were killed because he couldn’t channel and approve mana use to his priests fast enough.

after that Tiernon contacted another pantheon and got plans for the AARC.

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have Ramses kill off a plot armor type avatar which he used to fight when the avatar was human.
he can be a former wielder of Ruiden. and happened to kill ramses twice during the anilord years.
you know killing Ramses when he is still in his teens. then another once he is in his thirties.

then ramses plots his demise and he is attacked by 7 time warriors he happens to kill them but then is stabbed in the back by ramses. gets martyred during his prime 40’s.

Ramses would off him. have the avatars body surrounded by undead his animus going to be absorbed.
a lich preventing him from dispersing off plane.

Ramses would get back to exador. who would ask him why he went psycho on a random avatar which he would reply “plot armor”
then Talarius would blow the horn vaporizing the undead. one of the D’orcs would land on and crush the lich.

allowing plot avatar to ascend to tierhallon.

“plot armor saved him again” Ramses said.

then the doom boxes would play.

this would allow you to show some of the time warriors abilities before book 4.

about that last bit with the spy
What about the other avatars of tiernon which helped him kill off Orcus pretty sure it said that sentir fallon bought several other avatars with him. he would have help with masking Excrathadorus Mortis.
also he would have to tell them about the plan with the undead eating animus.

also Excrathadorus Mortis has exador’s name in it.
also it reminds me a bit of Matrim Cauthon’s dagger.

also some questions.

jacque sparrow was he from a mana rich world?
maybe romdan?
since it says some where in the book that the gods remake their favorite time periods on each of their worlds.
may be pirates of the Caribbean happened on romdan.

will the black pearl show up?

“Indeed.” Darg-Krallnom said. “However, we need the bodies to
fully man Doom and bring mana levels up to where we can open the
Doomalogues.”
“So are we the first?” Targh asked.
Darg-Krallnom nodded. “As planned.”

since targh said are we the first i woulsd assume tthat there are other mount doom’s with d’orcs.
reason they didn’t return? standing orders to guard the Doomalogues.

definition 2 of standing order.
2.
a military order or ruling that is retained irrespective of changing conditions.

like orcus dying. it would explain why the nysegard d’orcs did not return to mount doom.

Were some of the D’orc souls shoved in one of those Vergian Time Stasis traps or anima jars.

do the elven gods have less mana over all since elves tend to have a lower birth rate.

it would explain why they tend to use undead. they capture the souls of humans and convert them to mana.
with the undeads help. it would be a reason to capture the d’orc’s souls so the elves would use them as a mana source.
this way would allow you to bring some of Orcus’ former followers back.
its said in the body politic that Elves do not believe in souls in the human sense.

they wouldn’t care for capturing the souls of their enemies and using them as fuel.

have them be at the etterdam doom which would make tiernon see what the elves doing as an abomination.
and this time not interfere in the forces of doom vs. El’adasir war.

also why did some of the D’orcs not just not fly away.

was the bubble just one way?

did the elven gods supply the mana to keep up the bubble?

and finally was Melissance a follower of sentir fallon.
it would explain why she got cut off from tierhallon so fast.
sentir being paranoid.
also at this time he would have given talarius the dagger.

and she would hate sentir fallon.

also tentacle play =d>

one more thing what happened to orcus’s former demon followers. he must have had some.

sorry for the long ass post. fellow beta demons/readers.

its because of the speak up post.

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