[The Author Guy]

Not sure how well the swim. Hooves are quite different than flippers.

I suppose they could use the weight of their giant sized weapons to keep them on the bottom of the sea so they could battle down there.

However, those same weapons are so big and massive that there would be a lot of resistance to the weapons.

I do think it’s a good question as to whether their wings are nimble enough that the could be used to propel them through the water. Some birds can do this. But these aren’t arm wings, but back wings.

On the other end of the not breathing scale, if they had rocket packs, fighting in space would not be too much of a problem. It’s just moving.

Schwarzenfurze would be fine of course, wouldn’t even need the lighter (which wouldn’t work in a vaccum) simply releasing gas would propel her forward.

[The Author Guy]

[lol]

[The Author Guy]

The question as to whether he had the butter knife while fighting demons in his underwear is unanswered, but it would explain how he could do it with EM.

He is a great leader, very charismatic, but he doesn’t always think through the consequences of his logic/thinking. A lot of this is EM, he’s got some serious soul searching going on.

In the next release, I’ve gone back and inserted more Talarius stuff, and there is in fact a lot of Talarius you will be seeing in next release.

Incidentally, he has led people into the Abyss, the Inferno is following him into the Abyss.

The question that comes up is, “Is that line foreshadowing?” :-”

Also, I think they prefer the term ghoulashed to ghoulified. That is more regionally correct for Hungary, Transylvania, Romania etc.

I assume you are familiar with Hungarian ghoulash? Yes? Quite the ritual.

[The Author Guy]

Actually, your second question is answered by Talarius & Edwyrd in Alpha 3. Tom explicitly chose a similar (so easy/doable) but different looking person, Tom didn’t want anyone recognizing Edwyrd

Working on getting it out, but having font issues for PDF. Word itself is getting the bookmarks right, but has funky fonts, so trying to embed, but it’s locking up.

my pdf program gets fonts right, but misses the book marks.

[The Author Guy]

What I can say is that by the end of the book….all bets are off the deck shall shuffle

Currently I am, at this moment at 219,619 words. Just over 19,000 words since Alpha 2.

I am moving forward quickly enough that I am leery of my hard limits. I am sort of pushing to the end.

However, there are lots of very important things happening at this point. I do not necessarily want to get too far ahead without input as I setup a lot of critical stuff.

I am hoping to be able to add another six or seven thousand pages by Friday afternoon.

Would people prefer to have an Alpha 3 then or wait until Sunday night where I will have had two weekend days and maybe add another six or seven thousand words for a total of 30-35K since Alpha 2. I am writing both days on weekend, it’s just at what point to I pause to alpha publish?

[The Author Guy]

Yes, exactly; Canonization.

Which is why I was saying you would want to adjust the spells, the same is true with D’Orcing, they know exactly who/what they created.

Wizards generally don’t know what they are doing, when they encounter a tougher demon, they increase the level of their spells, which pours more mana into the demon making it more powerful.

Which is why Karth is going to be very powerful, they rather over did it on his creation and pumped an excessive amount of mana into his D’Orcing.

[The Author Guy]

In the case of demon’s and D’Orcs it essentially defines the fuel tank…to some extent

It’s building the body and innate abilities (lightning tail, claws, teeth, hide) plus the fuel tank in a case like Tom’s

For the most part at least. We have to keep in mind that the vast majority of summoned demons don’t have spell casting abilities and so the “fuel tank” is used to power innate abilities. E.g. breath weapon, incubus abilities, innate fear.

The innate fear thing is basically a fear spell if we were in a game.

In the case of holy beings, they radiate an “awe” spell

Saints, however are are bit more standardized since there are no surprises like Lenamare got.

[The Author Guy]

Oh, and the universal translation field is an innate ability.

[The Author Guy]

That is actually the Outer Planes!

However, I had been thinking something along this line as well, earlier in the conversation.

What if the Abyss, is actually a sealed off outer plane of a fixed nature created by the so called “Demon All Father” held in place by his will.

Of course, there is the other train of thought that has been raised in these Alpha discussions, which is that the Abyss is the original garden of eden, from which Lilith and Sammael never left. Unlike Adam and Eve who were kicked out.

This is based on some the appendices.

[The Author Guy]

Actually, the multiple-Astlans issue is discussed in another thread.

When people travel to the Abyss, it collapses their alternate time-stream selves; bodily transfer i.e. a portal opening to the singular Abyss collapses the time streams of the world to which the portal is opened.

Thus, the more frequent a plane (and I mean an entire plane e.g. localverse) interacts with the Abyss, the fewer alternate time streams there are.

As a consequences of Astlan and the localverse seeming to be the favorite “vacation spot” for arch demons, Astlan and it’s localverse don’t actually have a lot of time-streams.

It’s Schrodinger’s cat, the more the singular Abyss “measures” the state of a particular universe, the more collapsed its wave function is. I.e. you only have one state.

Conversely this can also, in the case where it doesn’t happen that often, serve as a bifurcation point to create permanent alternate universes. E.g. permanent alternate universe because more than one of the timestreams is strong enough on their own to survive as a full universe.

[The Author Guy]

[quote=fallen_one_84;4741]hey got a problem. here.

chapter 128
Mount Doom: DOA+7, Late First Period

Tom thought for a moment, “it also explains that why once
Doom shutdown and the D’Orcs no longer got tired, and many stopped
sleeping, so many of them gave up the will to live. It was this immortal
existential dread!” Tom shook his head, this made so much more sense
now.

in book two it said some of the elder D’orcs ended up sleeping in despair and gave up the will to live.

when they are discussing beds

Tom chuckled. “ But you did need babies.”
Zelda grinned. “ Indeed we did. But also because… well, to be honest, many of the elders were filled with despair and sorrow. This caused them to sleep more, and sometimes worse.”
Tom shuddered, thinking about the depressed D’Orcs.

which is it did they end up sleeping or not.
or did they just lie around in their beds in despair.
also when did the elders end up dying?
right after Orcus’s death or after a few hundred years.
[/quote]

I can see the apparent contradiction. It’s a subtle difference, and in some ways, two sides of the coin.

Doom shutdown so they did not “need” to sleep in order to charge their mana, or their bodies since they were no longer in competition with Doom.

However, many chose to sleep due to depression. I would argue that it was a fitful depressed sleep and not at all restful. When one has very severe depression they are tired a lot, regardless of how much sleep they did or did not get.

So only some D’Orcs slept, and even then it was probably not regular. I would suspect they might go months or years without sleep and then basically hibernate, “Trying to make the world go away.”

[quote=fallen_one_84;4741]

chapter 121
Murgatroy

Vaselle Zed and Teragdor

dicussing Vaselle’s boss

“And what does this Edwyrd do?” Teragdor asked while taking
another swig of beer.
“He’s an animage. Mostly pyromancy.” Vaselle answered, trying
to remember what his master had told him of this Edwyrd identity.

shouldn’t the pyromancy be pyromastery instead?

or is this an issue with Vaselle not knowing it’s pyromastery instead of pyromancy.
or is he dumbing it down for his audience.
[/quote]

Great question, such thoughts ran through my head reading this again. However, it’s a typo on my part. He should have said pyromastery.
However, if you had not caught this before it was published. I’d have changed my story to give one of those answers.

o:)

[quote=fallen_one_84;4741]
also in the beginning of the book Sam ends up thinking of breathing.

The ambient temperature should have
been near the boiling point of water, instead, a few minutes ago he had
seen his breath start to liquefy as it left his body and cooled. Clearly, it
was the carbon dioxide, but as it had gotten colder, he began to wonder
about the oxygen, nitrogen and argon. This form liked to breathe and it
would be terribly inconvenient if the air suddenly became liquid. His furs
would also get soggy.

doe’s Sam’s human form really need to breath or is it an idiosyncrasy of his.

Or is he eccentric enough to make his human form have all its needs and issues.

I think i remember Tom/Edwyrd forgetting to breath when he’s in his human form.
or maybe that’s from another book i am reading.

also woot used a big word.[/quote]

You are correct, it’s basically all of the above. He only needs to breathe to talk, but he is a perfectionist so he does breath in his human form.
It is, of course, a modified human form so that he can breath air at temperature extemes, even as his skin can withstand it.

However, breathing liquid would create a problem because that’s functional vs temperature proofing. I.e he’d drown, or more precisely cough and if bad enough, just have to stop breathing.

And finally: we now have a Woot Icon [woot]
Its on smiley page 3, or just ‘woot’ in square brackets.

[The Author Guy]

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 11) The D’Orcs had pulled back from Lilith’s embittered demons. The D’Orcs were now surrounding..
Have you considered changing the second sentence to ‘They’ Its just a lot of D’Orcs back to back.
[/quote]
Fixed the next D’Orcs to they, first in paragraph noun, then adjective.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 13) The two armies were both silent for several minutes. Darflow had closed his eyes. He opened them at last, shook his head. “You will honor your word, D’Orc Lord”

Being a little nitpicky here but im gonna point out some query’s. Is this an acknowledgement, an agreement, or a threat, or a blend. Its a bit ambiguous but Darflow seemed to be respectful during the conversation. Granted it looks like Tom trapped him in his own logic. Did that make him a little resentful? It may be useful to add a word or two to illuminate that. Like agree, or grumble, utter, just something that points it out.
[/quote]
Yes, resentful to some extent, but also a statement of what he (Darflow) would do. He will make Tom hold his word.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 14) As such, with sufficient training and practice we can traverse vast differences
Should be distances?
[/quote]
Traversing vast differences would be a great skill for a negotiator/diplomat or therapist.
🙂
Thx

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 41 paragraph 3, first sentence ,Guest should be Guests

⦁ Pg 44, They stepped through the door, a crackling field of coruscating light dancing over the doorway as each individual as they stepped through

Some additional words methinks

⦁ Pg 104, His physical health had been declining ever more quickly over the last one to two decades. His mind, and his powers, however, remained as powerful as ever.

May consider replacing powerful with Strong. Just to break up word monotony.

⦁ Pg 104, 6th paragraph. “That is what is”

Missing an ‘it’
[/quote]
Fixed, thx.
[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ Pg 110, this is a curiosity, did tom unconcsiously grow his size? Thats interesting! :3 Also interesting no one mentions it and he doesnt notice.
[/quote]
No, he concsciously grew his size. 🙂 He really is doing it consciously.

I will add a line that he shrinks back down when he comes to meet everyone.
[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ Pg 112 last paragraph. Tiernon Sighed. “Well for one thing, it is currently a very positively polarized.”
The ‘a’ between currently and very seems unnecessary
[/quote]
and incorrect. gone.
[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ On Pg 143 I always wondered why Tom didn’t think to check the portrait of the demon prince enemies. Even if he didn’t due to the shock of his appearance and orcus’ it would still be a logical thought to have
[/quote]
Good idea! He is spending quite a bit of time in Chapters post 140 in the LoD working with Antefalken on shapechanging. He should take a look at some of the others. Oooh….I know one that will send him and the readers off the wall!

[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ Another Note, I am unsure if the reasoning of the El’adasir is placed appropriately. It just seems like its something added in to be added in. Maybe they can remain mysterious for a bit more, talk around the issue and do the reveal another time? As is, it seems silly. Sure its a valid concern, but it just seems odd to go through that because theirs a magic prison they are scared of : I. This may stem from the lack of info we have on their thought process entirely. They don’t come off as particularly noble creatures, granted we see things from the ‘dark’ viewpoint. But even other Forces of so called Good notice their high handedness.

⦁ Chapter 130, fifth paragraph starting at the third sentence reads oddly
[/quote]
Revised (I think you mean this one)
On the orc side, Tal Gor was bringing his oldest brother and only sister, Bor Tal and Soon An; his brother Fel Nor was stay behind to continue his work with the tribe.
[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ Pg 166, Freehold: Early Third Period. Is smear a type of preserve or something for biscuits?
[/quote]
Ah, that’s very american/NYC. Didn’t even think of it.

About the only place you (or I guess I) use the phrases is with a bagal. “Bagal and smear” Often pronounced “Bagal and schmear” soft “c” like a hard “sh”

A smear is something you “smear” on your bagal. Typically some form of cream cheese, but it can be peanut butter, jelly/jan/preservative, or butter etc.

Now, if I were going authentic, for Tizzy and Tom, I would add some lox on top of the smear and a couple capers.

However, not sure how well the lox would stand up in the Abyss. (lox is a brined salmon filet)

[quote=Puck;4694
⦁ Page 171, The Inferno, Late Fourth Period, first paragraph, first sentence. “I will give you one big thing”

⦁ Pg 175, Ithgar, Orcopolis: Late Fifth Period, Sixth paragraph, Used ‘wondering’ instead of ‘wandering’

[/quote]

What is wrong with the P.171?

Fixed the wandering wondering.

Thanks

[The Author Guy]

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 11) The D’Orcs had pulled back from Lilith’s embittered demons. The D’Orcs were now surrounding..
Have you considered changing the second sentence to ‘They’ Its just a lot of D’Orcs back to back.
[/quote]
Fixed the next D’Orcs to they, first in paragraph noun, then adjective.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 13) The two armies were both silent for several minutes. Darflow had closed his eyes. He opened them at last, shook his head. “You will honor your word, D’Orc Lord”

Being a little nitpicky here but im gonna point out some query’s. Is this an acknowledgement, an agreement, or a threat, or a blend. Its a bit ambiguous but Darflow seemed to be respectful during the conversation. Granted it looks like Tom trapped him in his own logic. Did that make him a little resentful? It may be useful to add a word or two to illuminate that. Like agree, or grumble, utter, just something that points it out.
[/quote]
Yes, resentful to some extent, but also a statement of what he (Darflow) would do. He will make Tom hold his word.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 14) As such, with sufficient training and practice we can traverse vast differences
Should be distances?
[/quote]
Traversing vast differences would be a great skill for a negotiator/diplomat or therapist.
🙂
Thx

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 41 paragraph 3, first sentence ,Guest should be Guests

⦁ Pg 44, They stepped through the door, a crackling field of coruscating light dancing over the doorway as each individual as they stepped through

Some additional words methinks

⦁ Pg 104, His physical health had been declining ever more quickly over the last one to two decades. His mind, and his powers, however, remained as powerful as ever.

May consider replacing powerful with Strong. Just to break up word monotony.

⦁ Pg 104, 6th paragraph. “That is what is”

Missing an ‘it’
[/quote]
Fixed, thx.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 110, this is a curiosity, did tom unconcsiously grow his size? Thats interesting! :3 Also interesting no one mentions it and he doesnt notice.
[/quote]
No, he concsciously grew his size. 🙂 He really is doing it consciously.

I will add a line that he shrinks back down when he comes to meet everyone.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 112 last paragraph. Tiernon Sighed. “Well for one thing, it is currently a very positively polarized.”
The ‘a’ between currently and very seems unnecessary
[/quote]
and incorrect. gone.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ On Pg 143 I always wondered why Tom didn’t think to check the portrait of the demon prince enemies. Even if he didn’t due to the shock of his appearance and orcus’ it would still be a logical thought to have
[/quote]
Good idea! He is spending quite a bit of time in Chapters post 140 in the LoD working with Antefalken on shapechanging. He should take a look at some of the others. Oooh….I know one that will send him and the readers off the wall!

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Another Note, I am unsure if the reasoning of the El’adasir is placed appropriately. It just seems like its something added in to be added in. Maybe they can remain mysterious for a bit more, talk around the issue and do the reveal another time? As is, it seems silly. Sure its a valid concern, but it just seems odd to go through that because theirs a magic prison they are scared of : I. This may stem from the lack of info we have on their thought process entirely. They don’t come off as particularly noble creatures, granted we see things from the ‘dark’ viewpoint. But even other Forces of so called Good notice their high handedness.

⦁ Chapter 130, fifth paragraph starting at the third sentence reads oddly
[/quote]
Revised (I think you mean this one)
On the orc side, Tal Gor was bringing his oldest brother and only sister, Bor Tal and Soon An; his brother Fel Nor was stay behind to continue his work with the tribe.
[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Pg 166, Freehold: Early Third Period. Is smear a type of preserve or something for biscuits?
[/quote]
Ah, that’s probably very American/NYC. Didn’t even think of it.

About the only place you (or I guess I) use the phrases is with a bagal. “Bagel and smear” Often pronounced “Bagel and schmear” soft “c” like a hard “sh”

A smear is something you “smear” on your bagal. Typically some form of cream cheese, but it can be peanut butter, jelly/jan/preservative, or butter etc.

Now, if I were going authentic, for Tizzy and Tom, I would add some lox on top of the smear and a couple capers.

However, not sure how well the lox would stand up in the Abyss. (lox is a brined salmon filet)

[quote=Puck;4694]
⦁ Page 171, The Inferno, Late Fourth Period, first paragraph, first sentence. “I will give you one big thing”

⦁ Pg 175, Ithgar, Orcopolis: Late Fifth Period, Sixth paragraph, Used ‘wondering’ instead of ‘wandering’

[/quote]

What is wrong with the P.171?

Fixed the wandering wondering.

Thanks

[The Author Guy]

Just realized the smear comment was for Hilda with a smear on her biscuit ring.

Thought you were talking about Tizzy’s bagel.

She’s basically eating a bagel and smear, she just doesn’t have the reference point for the word.

“the biscuit ring half with smear that she’d been about to”

[The Author Guy]

[quote]“Who goes there?” Karis demanded holding up her ceremonial blade in defense.

The half-orc blinked a few times, his eyes also adjusting to the darkness of the chapel. “I am Teragdor al Tiernon, Apostle of Tiernon in Astlan.” He spoke haltingly as if Nysgardean was not his first language. “I come seeking the assistance of those of the Five Siblings faiths in retrieving a Knight Rampant from Astlan held prisoner in Nysegard. Who am I addressing?”

[/quote]

and

[quote]Karis shook her head in puzzlement, “No, what’s a rod? He is the Vicar General of the Shield of Tiernon.”

“Is everything OK in there? I told you the rangers should go first. If you are dead Teragdor, I will not hear the end of it.” A voice from the courtyard shouted in a rather hard to understand version of Nysegardean.

Teragdor shook his head, speaking in his more understandable accented Nysegardean. “I am good, I am simply speaking with Karis, Battle Priestess of Tiernon.”
[/quote]

[Author]

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