[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

In my opinion it’s not the lack of personality, it’s them difference compared to the first book.
This book is set straight after book one, however, it seems as if it’s set a few months after.
Ok, some charactrs I can see a connection between different personalities (Tom, Tizzy and maybe even Jenn), but some have changed so drastically it’s unbelievable. Gastrope for example, in book on, was not that powerful, and even less brave, and absolutely terrified of demons. Now he is jumping on flying carpets, shooting fireballs at ice dragons and storm liches, and summoning three demons at once, and we don’t see once that he is scared. That is no ‘His face is borderline on green now’.
That was some of my favourite parts of the first book: the descriptions of Gastrope’s face.
I also think Jehenna and Lenamare are no longer their usual self. No more smug looks as someone sees his spell or hears his ‘ingenious’ plan.
I’m going to write you a full page document on other flaws, in my opinion, but these are some of my main flaws.

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

Thanks, didn’t see that I was a beta demon, however, i am around page 390 or so.

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

I have a theory, which is that the server was trying to process all five of my requests, and therefore didn’t allow me access until it had processed all five.
I’m on page 305, gonna get to 109.1 tonight.

Some words on the book so far.
My main points:
-Character development: lots of characters seem to have lost most or all of their personality from book 1, in the space of a couple days
-Relationships: I enjoy how you have created many characters to follow, and I can see how they all relate, my biggest problem with this is you jump around to much to too many different characters, and quite a few of the long strings of writing seem almost pointless, such as Jenn admiring guys
-A lot more mystery which I like, it gives a political feel to it, and not just fighting. The bad part of this is that we don’t get to know more about Tom’s ‘new’ powers or if he has any
-I would like to see more of the ‘book’ which has slowly faded from the main plot, and now seems like something from the past

My conclusion at this point in time is that, like many other beta demons have said, there is not much of a middle.

p.s. I would like to see more of the old Tom, with more internal dialogue.

p.p.s. There are a few technical problems though; there have been multiple times where you leave out a word or put in a word (most of the time this extra word was ‘was’).

Still, very good book so far, I would definitely like to be a beta demon for the next book, and have thoroughly enjoyed the ‘series’ so far.

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

Hey T-A-G, I’ve tried about five times now, including doing what you suggested of just letting it sit there, but it’s still not letting me apply for beta.
p.s am I to late?

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

T-A-G, I am waiting for the site to sync, how long should I wait?

p.s I’m really excited about the possibility of being a beta demon!

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

Hey T-A-G!
I noticed other people couldn’t apply for Beta due to the link having tech. difficulties. I’m having that too. Can you help me?

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

I know this is 9 months later than the post, however, I’m new. So what can I say?
One post said pharaoh was spelled pharoah. It is actually Pharaoh.
Not sure if that was corrected… probably was.
I’d would also like to be a beta reader, for two main reasons. I have not done it before, but would like to do it and I think I would be good at it for small technical things, such as (incorrect grammar) , and (correct grammar) , … or ()
… and. Tizzy/T-A-G, you can forward this to the thread I’ve been using recently.
Thanks

o:)o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:)

p.s. I, myself am a really powerful demon (e.g. three-hundred and twenty-ninth order demon {about forty-seven time more powerful than the concordenax).

I can also check your maths, as quite a few numbers didn’t work, especially in the [color=red]hierarchy of the Abyss [/color] glossary thing!!

o:) o:)o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:) o:)

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

Hey, just saying, I’m actually AussieKid, but lost username and password, so I made an easier username and password.
Do you think there might be a few spin off short stories, such as from Rupert’s POV, or maybe from Tom’s as an aftermath novel (unless he gets permanently killed, or we leave him behind in a book, as [i]someone[/i] said that this main series is a collection of three or four?

Again =d> Can’t wait for next book 😀

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

If you don’t believe me about being AussieKid, that’s your problem; we are in the Abyss after all!

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

Hey Tizzy, can I change my name gain, ‘cuz every1 knows my name, I need to change it again.

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

I’ll take you up on that; it sounds wonderful, I think I’ll give it a miss.
Thanks for the offer though!!
o:)

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

No, really, it sounds wonderful, but I think I’ll give it a miss this time; maybe next time.
Oh, by the way, I’d like to be a beta demon, and I [i]do[/i] know the perils!

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

There is a mistake in the title of this thread/topic on this forum. There is also a mistake in the title of this forum. It says
“Mistakes on this sites and forums”.

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

[color=red]I, Icanremeberpito68decimalplaces, would like to become a beta demon, for the greater evil
(or is it greater good?)
Anyway, I would like to be a beta demon, ignore the mistake in line, two; I was typing to fast.[/color]

[Icanrememberpito68decimalplaces]

I forgot something. My second reason is top secret, demonic things y’know. Now, you may know that it’s secret, however, you don’t know what it is. [color=red][size=9]MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/size][/color]
THE PRO GRAMMAR.

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