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I actually work to avoid exactly this because I hate this rule.
The rule is that if the same person is talking, you don’t have an end quote between paragraphs, but you do have a begin quote at the begining of the paragraph. This rule has always bothered me.
So, while there are two quote marks missing, the one I need to replace is the one before “They are very strong” and I need to leave out the trailing one in the paragraph above.
They do this so you don’t have to re-identify the speaker with a “said” but it still bugs me.
Tom. Fixed. put Tom there
BTW if you have a bunch of these and it’s easier, you can do a single big post and just preface each one with the chapter and section.
I am thinking that might be faster for you and easier for me to make sure I get them all.
good catch; I had to read a couple times to find out what he was stopping.
He was trying to stop walking. I.e. halt and stare.
Fixed that and added …
You are correct!
It sounds like “you have chose the wrong battlesword” as if that’s a type of sword.
o:)
Yeah, it took me a second to remember.
Phaestus’s full name is Hephaestus (Greece) aka Vulcan (Rome) aka pTah (Egypt)
He’s basically saying “My god!” but since he is a god, he says “My me!” Because no god can have any other god before themselves…probably…
??????
This is the scene that reveals the connection between Exador and the Storm Liches. I’m giving context/background to the Storm Lich attack.
Exador set the Storm Liches on the Grove, they are allies of his with an army of Evil…they will be quite useful in flattening Freehold.
You can’t assume that every character that you meet is a major character, true we might not see the Greater Shadow again, but there are a number of Orcs you won’t see again. Main characters have to be able to interact with NPC’s as we might call them, and NPC’s have names.
ARGH!!!
I had this semilong post written and was editing and somehow hit some stupid keys and the chrome window closed, eating my stupid post.
I hate that. It’s been happening a lot with this new funky keyboard I got.
Anyway….argh argh argh now I have to repeat myself. This is why I hate live writing in web editors, it’s so easy to lose a long post.
AND THEN! I posted this to the other topic about Gastrope…guess it’s getting close to bed time…
Anyway, I am not saying I won’t use him. :-”
I was saying that just because someone has a name doesn’t mean they have to show up again.
The greater shadow as been around for some time, he was always going to show up, and will show up again. He’s involved in this plotline all the way through.
In this scene Exador learns that Trevin will be exiting the Grove on the Nimbus heading towards Murgandy. He has been spying on the Grove because they were a pain to the Anilords (and Ramses) and are a pain to him in his dealings with people on the other side of the Grove. Further, his allies in Nysegard hate the Grove.
So after hearing this from the greater shadow, he says he’s going to tell his allies in Nysegard.
During the attack, Trevin says that the storm liches must have had a spy because there is no way they could normally have that many resources at the exact location in time to attack on this scale.
Later, Exador talks about his allies getting their butts kicked, and how they are unhappy with him; but it’s not his fault if the didn’t supply adequate resources. He wonders why he even bothers with these folks.
So, anyway, the long story and part of the visions of Elrose and Maelen is that Freehold will be in the center of the conflict; one big reason they see themselves at the center is because Exador and friends are going to try and steal the book by force, i.e. flatten Freehold.
Exador will be using the Nyseguard Storm Lords/Storm Liches for that as well as some others.
So will go back and see if I can make this clearer without beating people over the head.
As you may have observed, I tend to vacillate between obscure references and beating people over the head with the obvious.
:d/
I shall think about it.
Again, I am thinking across multiple books, not just one volume.
Posterity will be able to read all the books one after the other, i.e. binge reading.
Thanks, got the errors.
As for this scene’s value and info dump.
I think “info dump” may be spelling out the problem.
This scene serves multiple purposes:
1) Gastrope”s background, family history; his concerns (student loans) trying to make him real for 20 something students with load debt
2) More creepy predatory behavior from your favorite character Trevin 🙂
3) Expose the linkSo perhaps the real problem is that it’s too explicative? And that there might be better ways of revealing this information?
Of course Tom does this sort of thing (mental anxiety dump) all the time…
See and I thought it was the empathy scene for Gastrope’ I.E. humanize him.
BTW Server being a bit wacky, web server IIS, zonked shortly after this post of yours, and now I am running some updates on it, there will probably another downtime during the windows update/reboot.
ARGH!!!
I had this semilong post written and was editing and somehow hit some stupid keys and the chrome window closed, eating my stupid post.
I hate that. It’s been happening a lot with this new funky keyboard I got.
Anyway….argh argh argh now I have to repeat myself. This is why I hate live writing in web editors, it’s so easy to lose a long post.
Anyway, I am not saying I won’t use him. :-”
I was saying that just because someone has a name doesn’t mean they have to show up again.
The greater shadow as been around for some time, he was always going to show up, and will show up again. He’s involved in this plotline all the way through.
In this scene Exador learns that Trevin will be exiting the Grove on the Nimbus heading towards Murgandy. He has been spying on the Grove because they were a pain to the Anilords (and Ramses) and are a pain to him in his dealings with people on the other side of the Grove. Further, his allies in Nysegard hate the Grove.
So after hearing this from the greater shadow, he says he’s going to tell his allies in Nysegard.
During the attack, Trevin says that the storm liches must have had a spy because there is no way they could normally have that many resources at the exact location in time to attack on this scale.
Later, Exador talks about his allies getting their butts kicked, and how they are unhappy with him; but it’s not his fault if the didn’t supply adequate resources. He wonders why he even bothers with these folks.
So, anyway, the long story and part of the visions of Elrose and Maelen is that Freehold will be in the center of the conflict; one big reason they see themselves at the center is because Exador and friends are going to try and steal the book by force, i.e. flatten Freehold.
Exador will be using the Nyseguard Storm Lords/Storm Liches for that as well as some others.
So will go back and see if I can make this clearer without beating people over the head.
As you’ve observed, I tend to vacillate between obscure references and beating people over the head with the obvious.
:d/
