[CrispyMouse]

Beta 2:
[quote]”Uhm, yes, we flew over the city and scanned it for demons, there were none in the city. Yes, we could detect the residue of demon [h]summing[/h], and various protective spells, but there were no demons in or around the city.”[/quote]

Should be “summoning”

[CrispyMouse]

As far as the “plot error”, in 82.0 Lenamare mentions having Trisfelt outside as eyes and ears and in particular mentions Telemirrors and that Trisfelt has his Telemirror. Entirely possible and likely that Elrose as part of coordinating the supplies also passed on what the council had learned.

[CrispyMouse]

Beta 2:
[quote]”I am Beragamos Antidellas, and I am here to see the [h]lady[/h] Hilda of Rivenrock.”[/quote]

Should “lady” be capitalize as it appears he is using it as a title.

[CrispyMouse]

Beta 2:

What is a fierd? Much later in the book I realized that this appears to be what they call the sun.

However why is it refered to as the fierd when other terms/items names seem to be changed to fit Tom’s language.

[CrispyMouse]

Beta 2:
[quote]”This sucks! I’ve spend the last four thousand years bored to death in this dump and now I am put in a [h]now[/h] win situation.”[/quote]

Should be “no”

[CrispyMouse]

Beta 2:
[quote]Stevos chuckled softly, yet in a friendly matter. “[h]Stevos[/h], you have nothing to worry about.”[/quote]

Pretty sure that should be “Teragdor”.

[quote]Teragdor inhaled suddenly and tried to [h]stop[/h]. “What[h]?[/h] You mean[h]?[/h]”[/quote]

Tried to stop what?
Also should there be ellipses (…) to show the incomplete thought?

[CrispyMouse]

Maybe put a link (like a post script) near the first usage of fierd to a section on the local solar system. That might help clear things up for people who care and other can just cruise on by.

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