[Draelith]

Cool, glad to help out! Still taking notes as I read through version 1, but will probably wait till version 2 draft for the second half (if I find any).

Overall really enjoying the plot and characters, especially the witty banter (Tizzy!). My wife always knows I’m pretty engrossed when I start chuckling while reading a story. 🙂

[Draelith]

Read through 44% so far and really digging the Abyssal tour. 🙂 This is the version downloaded the weekend of the 4th (for reference).

For first read through focused on breaks in my immersion due to misspelled words. Granted I’m no writer/editor myself, so I could be wrong in some instances! Will take another pass when the next version comes out and keep building. Denoting potential errors in [b][h]bold [/h][/b] and highlight with rough location (converted from epub to mobi for my kindle so chapters are all wonky sorry). Hopefully this is enough context to find them:

Page 26- Chapter 83
However, if he wanted to try and cheat one more time, I’d [b][h]give[/h][/b] him a lesson…”

Page 32- Chapter 83
Trisfelt said, puzzled but still a bit flustered by her bright and [b][h][b][h]fiery[/h][/b][/h][/b] smile.

Page 54 – Chapter 84
Clearly being talented in Demonology was [b][h]extraneous[/h][/b] for Etonian priesthood. So perhaps that had been for the best.

Page 64 – Chapter 85
“And what does Gandros [b][h]want[/h][/b] with the good Seer?”

Page 67 – Chapter 85
“Although, if they are being picky about who [b][h]they[/h][/b] let back in…”

Page 70 – Chapter 85
“He is, apparently, according to Maelen at least, [b][h]a[/h][/b] very powerful…”

Page 105 – Chapter 86
“Again, just Tom. I’m no lord of anything or [b][h]anyone[/h][/b].”

Page 170 – Chapter 90
Such a bargain was obviously [b][h]unholy[/h][/b] and a sin and abomination.

Page 171 – Chapter 90
Redirected it [b][h]from[/h][/b] himself to Talarius.

Page 178 – Chapter 91
Many of us, myself included, worship Hephaestus God [b][h]of[/h][/b] the Forge, Craftsmen and our people.

Page 200 – Chapter 93
“You met [b][h]his[/h][/b] father yesterday, Gnorman.”

Page 221 – Chapter 93
She glanced again at the woman’s way too revealing [b][h]clothes[/h][/b].

Page 247 – Chapter 95
Which one of us [b][h]is the[/h][/b] healer here?

Page 250- Chapter 95
“I would agree; while I don’t [b][h]know[/h][/b] Lenmare…”

Page 254 – Chapter 95
Talarius[b][h]’s[/h][/b] [b][h]armor[/h][/b] was very clearly rattling now…

Page 308 – Chapter 95
“Oh Great Master, Lord of [b][h]Lords[/h][/b]…

[Draelith]

Just finished my re-read of Book 1. Clicked the magic link and now waiting for my beta demon body to form… :d/

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