Alpha0 – Chapter 121
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Right now the order is Tom -> Hilda (discussing Treg) -> Tom -> Vaselle (w/ Treg) -> Tom -> Vaselle (w/ Treg)
The Tierhallon section comes between two Mount Doom sections. It seems it would flow better if it came after.
Also, what is the punch in this chapter? Maybe the whole Vasella bit could be one section and end the chapter the threat to release the Titans if people don’t start paying up.
Imagine this chapter is a TV scene between commercial breaks. We’ve a basically 3 POV jumping back and forth, but you want to ramp things up and the Titan threat is a key threat for this plot.
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